Post by Lexi on Jan 30, 2010 17:12:25 GMT -4
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TITLE: New Surprises, The Revised Version
AUTHOR: Lexi
TYPE (one-shot, chapters, part of a series): Chapters
RATING: (K, T, M, MA): T
LEAD CHARACTERS: Chris Halliwell, Piper Halliwell, Phoebe Halliwell, Paige Matthews
ORIGINAL CHARACTERS: Peyton Halliwell, Melinda Halliwell, Ryan
SHORT SUMMARY: This is a revised version of my first ever fic. Hopefully this will show how much my writing has progressed.
When a girl from the future comes asking Chris to come back to help her, the Charmed Ones finally get to see why Chris is in the past trying to save Wyatt.
Christopher Perry, as he was known at the moment, was alone in the attic. He spend a lot of time here, reading through the Book of Shadows, trying to find the demon that had turned his older brother evil. His thoughts would usually go back – forward, maybe? – to the time that he had come from, the people that he had left behind, so that he could come on this mission.
“Chris?” he heard his mother call him.
“Up here, Piper.” He called down to her, he had to call her Piper since she still had no idea who he was, and he intended to keep it that way. He looked up as the sound of footsteps could be heard on the stairs outside the attic, there were more than just one step and he wanted to know who was with his mother. Phoebe, Paige and Leo, who was holding baby Wyatt, all walked in to the attic close behind Piper. Uh oh, was he in trouble?
“What’s up?” Chris asked, trying to sound casual, keeping his defence up so they could not see that he was secretly worried.
“We just want to clear something up,” Leo stated, he still did not trust the young Whitelighter, especially since he had found out that he was half witch too. That had proven that Chris had lied, and he could not help but wonder what else Chris had lied about. If it was not for Chris saving Wyatt from The Order the other day, Chris would still be out on the streets if it were up to Leo, “It’s about Wyatt.”
Before anybody had a chance to say anything, a portal opened on the largest wall of the attic. Everybody in the attic looked towards the blue portal, to see a young girl stop out. Chris instantly recognised her and immediately worried that something had happened in the future.
“Peyton, what are you doing here?” Chris asked, looking at the young girl with dark brown hair and chocolate coloured eyes. She was covered in dirt but that did not worry Chris, he was used to seeing her like this now.
“Chris, we need you back.”
“Who’s this?” Phoebe questioned first, as all the Charmed Ones and Leo casted a suspicious glare at the newcomer, “Another girlfriend from the future?” Chris could not help but look at Phoebe with hurt evident in his eyes, but it was soon gone when he glanced back at Peyton.
“Bianca’s come back then.” Peyton asked, a cold tone clear in her voice, so everybody in the room knew of her dislike for the Phoenix assassin that Chris was in love with.
“She’s dead, Pey. He killed her,” Chris explained but jumped straight to the question that he had wanted to ask the minute she said why she had just travelled through time, “Why do you need me back?”
“Its Melinda,” Peyton looked like she was going to cry, as Chris waited to find out exactly what had happened before jumping to conclusions, “She’s…well…for the past three months…she…” Peyton had no idea how to tell Chris the truth.
“Peyton!” Chris shouted at her as fear ran through his body. Hearing his sister’s name worried him but the fact that Peyton was dragging this out scared him.
“He has her, and we haven’t seen her for three months.”
“What about Ryan, has he not…?” But Chris stopped as Peyton shook her head, “Ok,” he now sighed, while he figured out what he was going to do, “Please tell me you have a spell to take us back, the spell that I used was a one way door.” Straight away, Peyton nodded her head and pulled out a folded up piece of paper from the pocket of her tattered jeans.
“You’re seriously just going to go back?” Paige now questioned, causing both Chris and Peyton to look at her. Paige missed the sad look that Peyton had in her chocolate eyes.
“I need to, my family needs me.” So this was his family. Leo stepped forward.
“You’re not going back alone this time,” Leo told him, “You don’t know whether you can trust her.” Chris tried to stifle a laugh, but it was in vain, he just could not believe that now his father was showing that he cared.
“I know I can trust her, Leo,” Chris started at him, looking straight into his eyes, “She’s my cousin.”
“Well, we’re coming with you.” Paige stated, moving closer to Chris. They let him go to the future the first time and they still had no idea what had happened, they had no idea who Bianca had taken him to and what was in the attic of the Manor in the future. This time, she was going to find out.
“Chris…if they…” Peyton started looking towards the Charmed Ones. They could not come to their future, if they died before their time, it would change the future for the worst.
“Paige is right,” Piper agreed with her youngest sister, “You’re not making another trip to the future alone.” Chris could not argue anymore, he knew there was no way Piper would back down now, she was too stubborn, it was a Halliwell trait. He looked towards Peyton, seeing the fear that was in her eyes.
“Its ok,” Chris explained to her, “He won’t do anything to kill them yet.”
“I’m coming with you too.” Leo stated to Piper, worriedly, but that was something that Chris was not going to allow. The Charmed Ones coming to the future was one thing, but for Leo to be there too, it was just something that Chris could not handle, something that he refused to handle.
“You should stay here with Wyatt.”
“I’ll ask Sheila to look after Wyatt.” Leo said, looking towards Piper, who nodded with agreement.
“No,” Chris adamantly refused, “You really should stay here with Wyatt, just in case the demon that turns him shows up at Sheila’s,” he knew that it was unlikely, but he also knew that it was a good excuse, “Sheila and Darryl will be unable to protect him and something could happen to them.”
“Whatever Chris,” Peyton sighed, she wanted to get back to the future now. She only came to get Chris, not have a conversation with the Charmed Ones, “I left the hideout empty. If he finds it now, then…” Peyton didn’t want to continue, it was bad enough that she had said too much already.
Chris began to nod but then threw Peyton a shocked look, and a little worried too.
“What about Prue?” he questioned her, but saw the look in her eyes, that was all that he needed, “Hen and Hannah?”
“I’ll explain when we get there,” Peyton shook her head, again glancing at Paige with a sad look in her eyes. She did not want to have this conversation here, she did not want to have it at all but she needed her cousin back in their own time, she needed his help, “Right now, we need to get back.” Before Peyton could say anything else, Chris took the spell from her and glanced over it to make sure that it would work.
“Ok, draw the Triquetra,” Chris instructed his cousin and then turned to the Charmed Ones, with a laboured sigh, “I should really stop you from coming with us, but I know you won’t listen to me,” he looked at Leo, taking a second to glance at the baby Wyatt, “But you need to stay here.”
“Chris…” Leo began to argue but he was cut off by Phoebe.
“He’s right. You two stay here.” Leo sighed in defeat and then watched as Peyton drew the Triquetra with ease. He could not help eye her closely as she drew the family symbol in chalk on the wall of the attic.
“I hope you’re ready to see what your son has done to the future.” Chris looked towards Piper and then said the spell. A blue portal opened from the middle of the Triquetra on the attic wall, and then grew large enough for people to step through it. Before stepping through it, Piper turned to Leo and her son.
“We’ll be back soon.”
With that, the five people jumped into the portal, to find themselves in a run down house. Chris looked around the hide-a-way, the state of it did not surprise him but the silence and the stillness did. Usually there was something that was happening here, whether it was discussions on what to do next, where to hide, whether to run away or whether it was just their normal daily life – as normal as they could be right now. It was too quiet for him, much quieter than it had been before he left just seven months ago.
“What happened, Peyton?” Chris questioned, he had to stop looking around. When he left, his cousin Henry was working on mastering a new power he had received. Henry had been Paige’s eldest child, her only son. As he thought of him, he quickly cast an eye to Paige. He could not help but wonder whether Henry had decided to turn or whether he had been killed for not joining Wyatt’s side. Chris also remembered that two of his other cousins – Henry’s sister, Hannah, and Peyton’s sister, Prue – were also here at the time. He could not remember what they were doing before he left and he was not going to think about it either, he did not want to remember, he was going to change all of this. There was just one person that he needed answers about, “What happened to my sister?”
Peyton never had a chance to answer as a ripple formed in the air. A demon shimmered in, with a body in his arms. Piper raised her hands ready to blow up the demon, but the demon simply placed the limp body on the floor and then shimmered back out again. The Charmed Ones looked at Chris and Peyton in shock, each of them with their own questions, wondering why they had not even worried about the fact that a demon had just turned up in the house.
TITLE: New Surprises, The Revised Version
AUTHOR: Lexi
TYPE (one-shot, chapters, part of a series): Chapters
RATING: (K, T, M, MA): T
LEAD CHARACTERS: Chris Halliwell, Piper Halliwell, Phoebe Halliwell, Paige Matthews
ORIGINAL CHARACTERS: Peyton Halliwell, Melinda Halliwell, Ryan
SHORT SUMMARY: This is a revised version of my first ever fic. Hopefully this will show how much my writing has progressed.
When a girl from the future comes asking Chris to come back to help her, the Charmed Ones finally get to see why Chris is in the past trying to save Wyatt.
New Surprises
Version 2
Chapter 1: The Trip
Version 2
Chapter 1: The Trip
Christopher Perry, as he was known at the moment, was alone in the attic. He spend a lot of time here, reading through the Book of Shadows, trying to find the demon that had turned his older brother evil. His thoughts would usually go back – forward, maybe? – to the time that he had come from, the people that he had left behind, so that he could come on this mission.
“Chris?” he heard his mother call him.
“Up here, Piper.” He called down to her, he had to call her Piper since she still had no idea who he was, and he intended to keep it that way. He looked up as the sound of footsteps could be heard on the stairs outside the attic, there were more than just one step and he wanted to know who was with his mother. Phoebe, Paige and Leo, who was holding baby Wyatt, all walked in to the attic close behind Piper. Uh oh, was he in trouble?
“What’s up?” Chris asked, trying to sound casual, keeping his defence up so they could not see that he was secretly worried.
“We just want to clear something up,” Leo stated, he still did not trust the young Whitelighter, especially since he had found out that he was half witch too. That had proven that Chris had lied, and he could not help but wonder what else Chris had lied about. If it was not for Chris saving Wyatt from The Order the other day, Chris would still be out on the streets if it were up to Leo, “It’s about Wyatt.”
Before anybody had a chance to say anything, a portal opened on the largest wall of the attic. Everybody in the attic looked towards the blue portal, to see a young girl stop out. Chris instantly recognised her and immediately worried that something had happened in the future.
“Peyton, what are you doing here?” Chris asked, looking at the young girl with dark brown hair and chocolate coloured eyes. She was covered in dirt but that did not worry Chris, he was used to seeing her like this now.
“Chris, we need you back.”
“Who’s this?” Phoebe questioned first, as all the Charmed Ones and Leo casted a suspicious glare at the newcomer, “Another girlfriend from the future?” Chris could not help but look at Phoebe with hurt evident in his eyes, but it was soon gone when he glanced back at Peyton.
“Bianca’s come back then.” Peyton asked, a cold tone clear in her voice, so everybody in the room knew of her dislike for the Phoenix assassin that Chris was in love with.
“She’s dead, Pey. He killed her,” Chris explained but jumped straight to the question that he had wanted to ask the minute she said why she had just travelled through time, “Why do you need me back?”
“Its Melinda,” Peyton looked like she was going to cry, as Chris waited to find out exactly what had happened before jumping to conclusions, “She’s…well…for the past three months…she…” Peyton had no idea how to tell Chris the truth.
“Peyton!” Chris shouted at her as fear ran through his body. Hearing his sister’s name worried him but the fact that Peyton was dragging this out scared him.
“He has her, and we haven’t seen her for three months.”
“What about Ryan, has he not…?” But Chris stopped as Peyton shook her head, “Ok,” he now sighed, while he figured out what he was going to do, “Please tell me you have a spell to take us back, the spell that I used was a one way door.” Straight away, Peyton nodded her head and pulled out a folded up piece of paper from the pocket of her tattered jeans.
“You’re seriously just going to go back?” Paige now questioned, causing both Chris and Peyton to look at her. Paige missed the sad look that Peyton had in her chocolate eyes.
“I need to, my family needs me.” So this was his family. Leo stepped forward.
“You’re not going back alone this time,” Leo told him, “You don’t know whether you can trust her.” Chris tried to stifle a laugh, but it was in vain, he just could not believe that now his father was showing that he cared.
“I know I can trust her, Leo,” Chris started at him, looking straight into his eyes, “She’s my cousin.”
“Well, we’re coming with you.” Paige stated, moving closer to Chris. They let him go to the future the first time and they still had no idea what had happened, they had no idea who Bianca had taken him to and what was in the attic of the Manor in the future. This time, she was going to find out.
“Chris…if they…” Peyton started looking towards the Charmed Ones. They could not come to their future, if they died before their time, it would change the future for the worst.
“Paige is right,” Piper agreed with her youngest sister, “You’re not making another trip to the future alone.” Chris could not argue anymore, he knew there was no way Piper would back down now, she was too stubborn, it was a Halliwell trait. He looked towards Peyton, seeing the fear that was in her eyes.
“Its ok,” Chris explained to her, “He won’t do anything to kill them yet.”
“I’m coming with you too.” Leo stated to Piper, worriedly, but that was something that Chris was not going to allow. The Charmed Ones coming to the future was one thing, but for Leo to be there too, it was just something that Chris could not handle, something that he refused to handle.
“You should stay here with Wyatt.”
“I’ll ask Sheila to look after Wyatt.” Leo said, looking towards Piper, who nodded with agreement.
“No,” Chris adamantly refused, “You really should stay here with Wyatt, just in case the demon that turns him shows up at Sheila’s,” he knew that it was unlikely, but he also knew that it was a good excuse, “Sheila and Darryl will be unable to protect him and something could happen to them.”
“Whatever Chris,” Peyton sighed, she wanted to get back to the future now. She only came to get Chris, not have a conversation with the Charmed Ones, “I left the hideout empty. If he finds it now, then…” Peyton didn’t want to continue, it was bad enough that she had said too much already.
Chris began to nod but then threw Peyton a shocked look, and a little worried too.
“What about Prue?” he questioned her, but saw the look in her eyes, that was all that he needed, “Hen and Hannah?”
“I’ll explain when we get there,” Peyton shook her head, again glancing at Paige with a sad look in her eyes. She did not want to have this conversation here, she did not want to have it at all but she needed her cousin back in their own time, she needed his help, “Right now, we need to get back.” Before Peyton could say anything else, Chris took the spell from her and glanced over it to make sure that it would work.
“Ok, draw the Triquetra,” Chris instructed his cousin and then turned to the Charmed Ones, with a laboured sigh, “I should really stop you from coming with us, but I know you won’t listen to me,” he looked at Leo, taking a second to glance at the baby Wyatt, “But you need to stay here.”
“Chris…” Leo began to argue but he was cut off by Phoebe.
“He’s right. You two stay here.” Leo sighed in defeat and then watched as Peyton drew the Triquetra with ease. He could not help eye her closely as she drew the family symbol in chalk on the wall of the attic.
“I hope you’re ready to see what your son has done to the future.” Chris looked towards Piper and then said the spell. A blue portal opened from the middle of the Triquetra on the attic wall, and then grew large enough for people to step through it. Before stepping through it, Piper turned to Leo and her son.
“We’ll be back soon.”
With that, the five people jumped into the portal, to find themselves in a run down house. Chris looked around the hide-a-way, the state of it did not surprise him but the silence and the stillness did. Usually there was something that was happening here, whether it was discussions on what to do next, where to hide, whether to run away or whether it was just their normal daily life – as normal as they could be right now. It was too quiet for him, much quieter than it had been before he left just seven months ago.
“What happened, Peyton?” Chris questioned, he had to stop looking around. When he left, his cousin Henry was working on mastering a new power he had received. Henry had been Paige’s eldest child, her only son. As he thought of him, he quickly cast an eye to Paige. He could not help but wonder whether Henry had decided to turn or whether he had been killed for not joining Wyatt’s side. Chris also remembered that two of his other cousins – Henry’s sister, Hannah, and Peyton’s sister, Prue – were also here at the time. He could not remember what they were doing before he left and he was not going to think about it either, he did not want to remember, he was going to change all of this. There was just one person that he needed answers about, “What happened to my sister?”
Peyton never had a chance to answer as a ripple formed in the air. A demon shimmered in, with a body in his arms. Piper raised her hands ready to blow up the demon, but the demon simply placed the limp body on the floor and then shimmered back out again. The Charmed Ones looked at Chris and Peyton in shock, each of them with their own questions, wondering why they had not even worried about the fact that a demon had just turned up in the house.
