2008 WitchWRITER Finalist Beta
Post by Melissa on Jun 26, 2008 17:46:22 GMT -4
SONG TITLE: Angel
ARTIST: Aerosmith
SONGWRITER: Child, Desmond/ Tyler, Stephen
SONGFIC TITLE: Angel
SONGFIC AUTHOR: Melissa
RATING: (K, T, M, MA): K
LEAD CHARACTERS: Piper
ORIGINAL CHARACTERS:
SHORT SUMMARY:
Piper walks outside. The night is dark, the stars are shining bright. The moon is full, but the person who matters isn't there to share it with her. A week ago the elders took her husband away. She doesn't understand why they would do this to her. She has proven to them many times she can be married to an angel & still fight evil. He didn't deserve this. She feels a tear sliding down her cheek as she looks up to the sky.
"I'm alone, yeah, I don't know if I can face the night
I'm in tears and the cryin' that I do is for you
I want your love
Let's break the walls between us
Don't make it tough
I'll put away my pride
Enough's enough
I've suffered and I've seen the light"
She puts her hands to her heart. She can feel it breaking in half. How can she go on. She knows she needs to, but how do they expect her to. She closes her eyes again & sees Leo smiling at her before leaning over to give her a kiss. His eyes are shining bright, his eyes full of love when he looks at their son. Oh, how much they both need him. She falls to her knees yelling out his name. "Leo! Leo! Leo! I love you. Please come back to us."
"Bayayby, you're my angel
Come and save me tonight
You're my angel
Come and make it all right"
After a moment, she doesn't hear the sound of orbing. The sound of his voice asking her if everything is okay. All she hears is the silence of the night.She just sits there on the pavement, pouring her heart out in tears. Her eyes are burning, her heart aches. All she knows is with him gone, a part of her is missing. She feels a rain drop on the top of her head. She looks to the sky & sees it's starting to rain. She heads back to her room & sees the empty bed they shared not so long ago. She remembers her wedding day and it was covered with rose petals. How happy she was to be marring him. Now, here she is, all alone.
"Don't know what I'm gonna do about this feeling inside
Yes it's true, loneliness took me for a ride
Without your love I'm nothing but a beggar
Without your love a dog without a bone
What can I do? I'm sleepin' in this bed alone"
She opens the closet door & grabs one of his shirts & slips it on. She feels close to him, she can smell his scent, & almost feels the comfort of his arms. She lays down & closes her eyes dreaming he is back. When she sees him, she tells him what is in her heart. Even if its only a dream.
"Come and save me tonight
You're the reason I live
You're the reason I die
You're the reason I give when I break down and cry
Don't need no reason why
Baby, baby, bayayby
You're my angel
Come and save me tonight"
She sees him smiling at her & he whispers the words "I Love You Always." She all of a sudden wakes up thinking she really heard his voice. She looks around the room, but he is nowhere in sight. She realizes it was only a dream. Piper lays back down. She swears she felt his presence. He must of come to her in her dreams. He has done that before.
"You're my angel
Come and save me tonight"
As she closes her eyes to go back to sleep, as much as she misses him. Someday, somehow, someway, he will return to her. She knows that. She believes that in her heart. Piper knows it's going to be very hard without him, but she has the love of her sisters & there support to help her through this. For now, she'll dream of him whenever she feels the need to be near him. As she's falling asleep, she smiles.
ARTIST: Aerosmith
SONGWRITER: Child, Desmond/ Tyler, Stephen
SONGFIC TITLE: Angel
SONGFIC AUTHOR: Melissa
RATING: (K, T, M, MA): K
LEAD CHARACTERS: Piper
ORIGINAL CHARACTERS:
SHORT SUMMARY:
Piper walks outside. The night is dark, the stars are shining bright. The moon is full, but the person who matters isn't there to share it with her. A week ago the elders took her husband away. She doesn't understand why they would do this to her. She has proven to them many times she can be married to an angel & still fight evil. He didn't deserve this. She feels a tear sliding down her cheek as she looks up to the sky.
"I'm alone, yeah, I don't know if I can face the night
I'm in tears and the cryin' that I do is for you
I want your love
Let's break the walls between us
Don't make it tough
I'll put away my pride
Enough's enough
I've suffered and I've seen the light"
She puts her hands to her heart. She can feel it breaking in half. How can she go on. She knows she needs to, but how do they expect her to. She closes her eyes again & sees Leo smiling at her before leaning over to give her a kiss. His eyes are shining bright, his eyes full of love when he looks at their son. Oh, how much they both need him. She falls to her knees yelling out his name. "Leo! Leo! Leo! I love you. Please come back to us."
"Bayayby, you're my angel
Come and save me tonight
You're my angel
Come and make it all right"
After a moment, she doesn't hear the sound of orbing. The sound of his voice asking her if everything is okay. All she hears is the silence of the night.She just sits there on the pavement, pouring her heart out in tears. Her eyes are burning, her heart aches. All she knows is with him gone, a part of her is missing. She feels a rain drop on the top of her head. She looks to the sky & sees it's starting to rain. She heads back to her room & sees the empty bed they shared not so long ago. She remembers her wedding day and it was covered with rose petals. How happy she was to be marring him. Now, here she is, all alone.
"Don't know what I'm gonna do about this feeling inside
Yes it's true, loneliness took me for a ride
Without your love I'm nothing but a beggar
Without your love a dog without a bone
What can I do? I'm sleepin' in this bed alone"
She opens the closet door & grabs one of his shirts & slips it on. She feels close to him, she can smell his scent, & almost feels the comfort of his arms. She lays down & closes her eyes dreaming he is back. When she sees him, she tells him what is in her heart. Even if its only a dream.
"Come and save me tonight
You're the reason I live
You're the reason I die
You're the reason I give when I break down and cry
Don't need no reason why
Baby, baby, bayayby
You're my angel
Come and save me tonight"
She sees him smiling at her & he whispers the words "I Love You Always." She all of a sudden wakes up thinking she really heard his voice. She looks around the room, but he is nowhere in sight. She realizes it was only a dream. Piper lays back down. She swears she felt his presence. He must of come to her in her dreams. He has done that before.
"You're my angel
Come and save me tonight"
As she closes her eyes to go back to sleep, as much as she misses him. Someday, somehow, someway, he will return to her. She knows that. She believes that in her heart. Piper knows it's going to be very hard without him, but she has the love of her sisters & there support to help her through this. For now, she'll dream of him whenever she feels the need to be near him. As she's falling asleep, she smiles.
WitchWRITER M.C. 
Very, *very* nicely done, Melissa! You definitely have a knack for these things!
WitchWRITER Main Judge 
Like Sammi, I could also hear the song in my head and pictured what was going on while reading. Looking forward to seeing what you come up with next. 